Monday, April 27, 2009

Elegy : Handwritten Tragedy


Dancing by the window,
Tiptoeing in vain,
Chilly winds of May,
Kicking everything in,
This theory of pain,
Is driving her insane,
Driving her insane,
The sound of your windpipe,
Bursting within,
Inspiring restraints,
Wolves each in hindsight,
Unleashed in packs,
Tell me why is it this way?
Even the blind could notice,
One seat fifteen to deliver,
Struggling to step over,
We're all paranoids,
Terrified by shadows,
Creeping in our beds,
Market the youths,
All the unnecessary truths,
Fads makes them amused,
Trapped in fun filled guilt,
Make them brainwashed,
Overwrite the codes instead.




-AhmadN

8 comments:

As said...

hey naeem
cubalah hantar sajak ni ke mana2 english mag yang mantap2

:D

menyampah aa tgk terbiar kat blog ni ja


p/s: haha kejam tak as?

Ahmad Naeem said...

nak hantaq ek?

maybe kena tanya kema la kot,

she should know the necessary

magazines or people, as tau tak

kat mana nak send?

erm but i think i still need to

improve a lot more before i could

seriously consider myself good or

worthy enough of a spot in

magazines or websites...hehe


p/s: kejam, in a good way, dimaafkan

Akmal Azeman said...

a like how u used a female as ur first subject in ur first stanza. :) er...diff colour tu indicate diff stanza kan? huhu.

owh. as in for poetry publication, im not so sure lah. bt if u write poetry n stuff, u should have a facebook n join the poetry underground. my poetry lecturer said that its a 'must' for poets to join the 'club'. she's also a member n just recently published her work with other poets under the poetry underground publication (rsnye la). i have 1 copy, dpt sbg hadiah for winning a mini poetry competition (2nd place je pon haha), others have to pay rm10 hahahah *ketawa bangga* :p haha. jk.

anyway. there's others: puisi poesy, also Poetika Malaysia and The Malaysian Poetic Chronicles, all in fb, yg ni 2 tak join lagi.

the thing about writing, i dont tink that im even good. haha. aku stop tulis poetry ms umur 16 sbb at that time, aku mcm rs semua puisi2 aku bodoh, emo semacam n ntah pape. huhu. now im trying to get bk on track tp agk susah wuwuwuw (T_T)

p/s: u can checkout my lecturer's blog, i put her link: Mdm Sheena. :)

Dammit said...

Ni yang aku tak suka ni, kalau in bm boleh la aku komen panjang-panjang. Tapi english aku cuma boleh cakap, 'nice' atau 'smart' atau 'best' je. haha. tapi, tiga2 perkataan ni utk entri ni lah.

Btw, aku rasa tu macam cover album Radiohead. ye ke?

Ahmad Naeem said...

Kema,

Erm nope i just add colours,
I dont think its necessary to add or separate the lines this time.
Tak silau kan mata,kan kan?
hahaha

facebook?
erm, aiseh..maybe later la
i'll reactivate my account,
then i'll republish the old posts/poems to them..

erm its never a problem i guess,
im not that good,
in fact i am worse..haha
i just write whats comes to my mind,

thanks for the link

:)


Dammit,

Alaa comment la saja,
bukan kena bayaq apa pun hahaha
erm, thanks for the undeserving words,
hah apa lagi..buat la rythm

ha tu cover album radioheaddddd...weeehoo..hehe

Mohd. Ramadan said...

Erm.. tak sangka ang ber'poem'.. kah3x...

p/s: Ang knai ak lg tak?? :p

Ahmad Naeem said...

hehe,

kenai la,
Ramaaaadhaaannn hehe
hg la buat buat x kenai aku,hehe

erm ber"poem"...
boleh la skit2, not that good anyways,average :)

As said...

naeem
bile join 'clubs' ni u can compare urself and showed ur poem to them

but for me, antaq ja memana takpa. Sekali dua pertama biasa aa kena reject. Tapi ad eje terus accepted.

Part antar katne try ah tanya azree
but ur case ni cma special sbb english :)