These charlatans,
These old dissemblers.
Running about,
Pigs without its snout.
Loud, my they were loud,
Preaching towards the clouds.
Wanting to wait,
Desiccating of Euphrates,
Miasmas to never not dissipate,
Because this world they love to hate,
Is coming to its fate.
Liar Liar,
Your pants ain't on fire,
They're covered in your saliva,
Mouthed out from your biretta.
This condescending truth,
Its written proof.
Ever since they'd been cast out,
They're committed to perplex us,
They'd promised a bout,
In order to keep us out,
A place we would gleam about.
Disregard your hindsight,
Your body takes a fight,
This soul in a plight.
Stoop down below,
Shallow, very shallow,
This seeds you haven't sow.
Ploughed later to bestow,
A better tomorrow.
This promise I rather you keep.
--AhmadN
14 comments:
I dont really understand the meaning of this fantastic writing, but i can assure u that its a hell of an intelligent artwork bro...seriously..hehe. - fitri.
My hats off to you. Very well written n very meaningful. Keep up the good work.
wah best amat~!
fantastic lah macam anony cakap.
U blend the soul and the language...ok..hehe
;)
deep far away you go
people wont reach you
until they themselves
reach the soul of the poem
ok. ter. ca. bar.
sekian.
hahahah
Fitri@anonymous,
thanks for your undeserving words,
it was a moment of inspiration for me when i wrote it..
hotmama,
thanks for your kind words.
As,
i blended everything i guess,
mcm masak2 la pulak haha
well thanks, im undeserving of such appreciative words..
its good to see people understanding and trying to make up what it meant...
i myself was startled when i finish writing this piece
:)
Kema,
No one's challenging no one,
hehe just a moment of inspiration,
well have u tried to encrypt the meaning?
hehe..
ok. FINALLY dat my xam is over, i managed to absorb it. owh. with the help of my beloved kamus oxford. LOL!
anyway. i hope u dont mind me writing an analysis here, its mostly mcm org yg giler sudoku. as for me, poetry is my very own sudoku. err?? haha
anyway. paraphrases: its all about one who claimed to have owh-so-many knowledge n talks too much about sumting bt actually knws nothing and he keeps on giving promises n bla bla bla bt he nvr really keeps it. hence, the theme is...kinda related to politics. ye ke? hahah. sori. i mean, the way u describe it, thr's no other better beings could be those kinda people except politicians. or could it be adverts?
owh. mind if i share some techniques with u? kinda an advice. hihi
btw. im still having writers block. not a single inspiration pop up. haihh! could b d xam. LOL!
Kema,
sorry for the delayed reply...
yes i'd be delighted if u want to analyze or whatever,
its up for any sort of interpretation, but to me its not about politics, no no no.
i hate politics.. repeat HATE
ehe..erm what i wrote isnt specific about a person,
each paragraph/phrase represents diff stuff..
yeah would love to share stuff..you could teach me a thing or two..
what better way to be better at poetry than learning it from a BEN student
:)
wooo
coll
like your words
perhaps my english like urs
joegrimjow,
thanks for ur compiments,
thanks for visiting the site as well...peace
owh. FYI: I also HATE politics!!!! u knw, last month all the paper talks about was politics. so i ended up skipping the whole owh-so-important-news and only read todays' tv prog and the comic strips. hahah. (>_<)
owh. this is the problem wit ur writing:
"..what i wrote...each paragraph/phrase represents diff stuff.."
so. the key in writing, especially a poetry is that, regardless of the many emotions u were feeling while u write, u need to b able to channel at least ONE feelings. yes. poetry is subjective. but emotion is the most vital key in writing it. as a writer myself (an amateur je pon hahah),i understand the whole mixed up feelings while writing but u need to channel only 1 for a certain poem. the idea is that, it wont leave the readers to b feeling confused n also that u may express urself better that in the end, u will feel more satisfied. n yeah, u probably didnt realise that u had mixed up feelings while u write but try to sense it whn u write a next one. just take the strongest feeling at that moment. after all, poetry is all about capturing a moment's emotion n point of view.
err...i hope i make sense. huahuahua. regardless, slmt mencuba! =D
Ter-ca-bar. hahaha tiba2 je. aku tau meaning lagu ni, maksudnya, 'oi aku dah buat lyric, ko bila nak buat lagu?'. hahaha
owh. kata2 dammit tu mcm khas ditujukan kepada aku jer...??? ataupon aku yg suke suki memerasankan diri?? ahahah
ni kira 2 in 1 lah. dua2 terkena. hahaha
kema,
ok firstly thanks for the tips.
but i wasnt writing diff stuff,
salah ckp pulak..lol
it has a theme,
but each paragraph i go about how that certain theme/incident affects others.
for most parts i am depicting the avid human being that waits for the world to come to an end, that only then will they want to change and live a life that they're supposed to.
thats the first few lines/para
then comes
"..its written proof.."
this has to do with the holy book...
then when i say "...ever since they've...gleam about"
..it is about how the devil was vanquished to earth by God and how they have pledged to trick and make us believe what we're not suppose to believe.
hehe..sorry na...but i think i had a theme...only maybe tak tersusun
Dammit,
oi aku dah buat lyric kot...BILA hg nak buat lagu..hahaha
erm sudah jgn gaduh2 kat sini...hehe
nanti aku pulak yg
ter.ca.barrrr
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